There was a day
when I was young
just a flash in time
a moment . . . stirring like the wind
to take my breath away
and it was You.
I walked into a room of people
but only you were there.
A sun tanned face turned to me
wide eyed and chiseled . . . a strong
face full of questions so intense
and then . . . that smile
that absolutely perfect smile . . .
sunshine and heartache all in one.
Stranger . . .
you brushed against me
in my dreams a thousand times
but on that day your flesh was real.
Little did I know
you would still be here
in my bed today.
Joanne Cucinello 2009
That is just beautiful!!!! Dad must love it. xo
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing!
ReplyDeleteChristine . . . Dad did love it . . . Thank you, hon.
ReplyDeleteThank you also, Kelli!
A lovely, heartfelt poem. I'm looking forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful and well put poem. I like it very much.
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Hello Rico,
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments. I hope you stop by again to read some more. I had a chance to read your Funky Joints . . . very expressive poetry! Keep writing!
Hi Shannon,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the visit. I read your bio and sounds like you've got it all together in the right order.
Peace and Cheers!
I love the line "but on that day your flesh was real." I'm not sure I like the ellipses scattered throughout, but that's a minor issue.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gabriel,
ReplyDeleteI often use ellipses here and there in my poetry. In this piece more than usual. It's kind of become a spontaneous signature, but you've given me something to think about!
I'm glad you took the time to comment.
What a perfect and concise poem, not a wasted word yet moving and surprising.
ReplyDeleteI really liked it.
Barry,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for commenting on my poem. I'm really happy that you liked it.